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No 43 - Heartbreak Club by ~RMRippers:iconRMRippers:



Everybody's gettin' down tonight
In the Heartbreak Club while the moon is bright

Hear the blues band playin' their slow lament
See the mournful patrons dance their dark torment
The air is smoky and the lights are low
And the deadbeats cry with every drum beat blow

Everybody's gettin' down tonight
In the Heartbreak Club while the moon is bright

One woman is drinking a bottle of tears
Topping it off with a cocktail of fears
And the man at the bar wipes the glasses with woe
And frowns at the misers as they come and go

Everybody's gettin' down tonight
In the Heartbreak Club while the moon is bright

There's a junk round the backstreet injecting depression
Wondering when his heart will make an impression
Upon his dear sweetheart who's up on the dancefloor
With her tongue down the throat of another manwhore

Everybody's gettin' down tonight
In the Heartbreak Club while the moon is bright
©2007-2009 ~RMRippers
:iconrmrippers:

Author's Comments

Wow. It's midnight and I'm writing poetry. Tonight's been crappy for loads of people. I had my little upset, my best mate's finished with her ass of a boyfriend and got really upset about it and my other mate feels massively underappreciated.

Kinda inspired this. ENJOY!

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:iconmatt-taylor21:
i hope tomorrow is a better day for you =D...good poem though =D

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you have value; you are important; choose to be the best you; you can be (just a thought)=D
:icontar1988:
Great poem ! Inspired by sgt. Peppers lonely hearts club band by any chance ?

Anyhow, there is only one word that I would have written differently. Last stanza, first line: consider the word junk instead of drunk. Just a suggestion of course.

I really like the open metaphore of the club. Job well done I say !

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"hell is other people"
-Sartre

"each man is his own hell"
-Tar

"All in all, it's pretty much hell all the way, no matter how you slice the cake."
-Adrian Daniels

Join the revolution ! [link]
:iconblackrose-laz:
I'll agree with it being a shit day for ya, but its a great poem/song! You gonna write the music as well? =p
xx

:blackrose:

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SAQSAYWAMAN!

Don't let reality ruin your day!

[*geroovy baybay*]

:blackrose:
:iconfaeriesparkle:
One thing: "As frowns at the misers as they come and go" >> should be obvious :P

I wish there really was a Heartbreak Club. Misery does love company.

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If at first you don't succeed, skydiving is not for you.
:iconrmrippers:
thx

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But that was the problem with my dreams. They were always too realistic.

I’ll stick to my faux crème doughnut instead of my chocolate fondant
:iconrmrippers:
i say 'drunk' as in 'short for drunkard'

:P

thx

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But that was the problem with my dreams. They were always too realistic.

I’ll stick to my faux crème doughnut instead of my chocolate fondant
:iconrmrippers:
*shrug?* dunno lol

thx

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But that was the problem with my dreams. They were always too realistic.

I’ll stick to my faux crème doughnut instead of my chocolate fondant
:iconrmrippers:
:P

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But that was the problem with my dreams. They were always too realistic.

I’ll stick to my faux crème doughnut instead of my chocolate fondant
:iconmatt-taylor21:
your welcome =D

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you have value; you are important; choose to be the best you; you can be (just a thought)=D

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